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I.
Company Usage Guide
NOTE from ACE Copyediting.com:
A
recent poll of business professionals found that 80% lacked confidence in
their use of the English language. If you admit to being a part of this
vast majority, you will find a guide like this one helpful. Please
understand that "experts" differ in their explanations of what
is acceptable and unacceptable in today’s business writing; but, after
studying many sources, the following examples are considered the
consensus. Our desire is to help you express yourself with greater
confidence and ease and to make your written communication more precise
and dynamic.
If you decide your company needs a personalized writing guide, after
reading the following examples, ACE Copyediting.com can work with you to
produce one. Each company (industry) has a "language" that is
unique to its business niche. A personalized guide can deal with those
vocabulary differences.
Here is a sample of what your company’s usage
guide might contain:
Guide for Company Uniformity in
the Written Word
Introduction
"English is a remarkably clear,
flexible, and useful language. We should use it in all of our
communications." —Daniel O’Neal, Jr.
Our company is establishing this standardized usage guide to
lessen confusion and the lack of uniformity that is occurring in our
documents. Commonly used phraseology
and spellings in our published company documents (e.g., product releases
and brochures, workshop materials, sign-up brochures, manuals), in formal
correspondence with our clients, and in internal memorandums, differ too
often with
each writer. The result is frequently a diminished respect for our company
on the part of important customers. No one in our company is immune
to this malady. Our officers and managers are as confused as
the newest employee, regarding which standards to use. How, for
instance, do you write the following: zipcode, Zip code, ZIP Code,
ZIPcode? What
does ZIP mean?
It is not the purpose of this guide to criticize your writing skills,
but merely to bring to your attention that our company now has a manual that
each employee can keep handy for daily referral, whenever a written
project is being developed. Pedestrian, slipshod, or muddled writing
creates mistrust, confusion, and feelings of incompetence
that may reflect on our company image or our company products. Crisp and
to-the-point writing captures our readers' attention and earns respect
and trust from the very beginning. The result: lower
administrative costs, lighter work loads, less time spent explaining
intentions over the phone, and an enhanced company reputation for quality.
Our company strives for excellence in our product (s) and service (s), and
we feel strongly that our written documents should reflect that
quality.
Thank you for taking the time to thoroughly read this
writing guide, for reflecting on your particular writing weaknesses, and
for caring enough to work with us in elevating our levels of writing
skills.
"Don’t be afraid to seize whatever
you have written and cut it to ribbons. It can always be restored to its
original condition in the morning." —E. B. White
Glossary
Data:
Today, data is regarded as a collective noun, appropriate
for use not only as a term referring to one set of facts, but also to a body
or assemblage of information. The singular word datum is rarely used. There
is still considerable debate over whether or not data should always take a
singular verb. Most companies today have decided to use data as a plural
subject taking a plural verb and a plural pronoun. From a marketing
viewpoint, the proper use of this noun might well cause readers to pause and
take a closer look at what is being said. If you are in the business of
selling data, take a close look at the following examples.
Wrong: This data is not worth its salt. The data forms the basis
for our programming. (use data as a singular subject, taking singular
verbs, and singular pronouns)
Correct: These data are essential to our success.
The data soon take on a life of their own. Data form the basis for our
business. (use data as a plural subject, with plural verbs, and plural
pronouns)
Pronunciation: dahta is preferred by a few sources,
but Webster’s New World College Dictionary, Fourth Edition,
and most
American companies, prefer dayta.
Database/data base:
This is a hard one. Webster’s
Dictionary, New Revised Edition, has placed data base (2 words) as
the preferred spelling, with database a second choice. We see both
spellings used in publications, from newspapers to computer magazines to
correspondence with various clients. In the Handbook of Business English,
data base is also used as two words. The trend in the business and
computer world, however, is toward using database as one word. Our
company will always use database as one word. (Whichever version you select, have every employee use it consistently, in
every written document.)
Smithes’ Fine
Furniture:
Usually, singular common and
proper nouns show possession by adding an apostrophe and an s ('s). It is,
therefore, absolutely correct to write:
Smithes’s employees
wonder if they should use this rule in the strict sense of the rule, or
drop the last s, because it looks and sounds awkward.
Since most grammatical authorities
tell us we have a choice, it is also correct to use the possessive of our
company's name in the following manner:
Smithes’ policies are not only fair,
but generous.
Our company has decided to use the
latter. From now on, please use only Smithes' when using our
company name in written form.
Payer/payor:
Although you are probably accustomed to seeing payor on
many documents, especially in the healthcare or accounting fields, payer
is the correct spelling. There is no such word as "payor."
Wrong: What is the payor mix in the
community’s hospital district?
Correct: The payer mix varies by product
line.
ZIP Code:
ZIP is an acronym for Zone Improvement Plan. Acronyms are
written in all capital letters and without punctuation. They are pronounced
as words (SALT), rather than by letter (YWCA). ZIP Code is a proper noun (i.e.,
the name of a particular code, as in Morse Code), and is, therefore,
capitalized.
Wrong: Make sure every letter and package contains
the correct zipcode in the address.
Wrong: Our marketing letters were returned for lack
of correct Zip codes.
Right: ZIP Codes are an important element in
any mass mailing.
Usage
"Mend your speech a little,
lest it mar your fortune." —Shakespeare
Many of us, in our company, hold positions that include
writing as part of our jobs. Often, we are in a hurry—or under stress—and
end up writing whatever first comes to mind. We edit the document with a
quick computer spelling check (not realizing that if a real word is
typed, but the wrong word, no correction will be made), and a cursory
glance. We make little to no attempt to revise and adjust the wording, until
we have said exactly what we intended to say. It doesn’t seem to matter
how skilled or knowledgeable we are about our subject matter; when it comes
to putting our thoughts into print, we all too often find ourselves
resorting to worn-out expressions, stilted overly-formal prose,
redundancies, and ineffective business "jargon." Consult the
following examples for assistance in improving your personal skills:
A. Confused/Misused Words
All right/ alright:
The correct spelling of this "word" is the first
one. Alright is never correct in acceptable usage. The word
"alright"
doesn’t exist, even though you see it spelled this
way in publications and contemporary music and even on television ads. It is merely being misspelled! (Michael
Jackson and Dee Dee Messina are two performers who have written albums using
the misspelled version!)
Wrong: It is not alright for Eddie Murphy to have named his
album Alright!
Correct: "All right!" exclaimed
Eddie. "Next time I’ll spell the name of my album with two
words!"
Anxious/ eager:
It is easy to remember which of these words to use in your
writing. Anxious is involved with anxiety and denotes apprehension and
uneasiness. It is incorrect, therefore, to say, "Barbara and I are
anxious to work with your association members." You are not uneasy
about it; you are "highly desirous" of working with them!
Wrong: David and Jean are anxious to meet
with you next week.
Correct: We are eager to meet with you next month, to
plan our workshop.
Between:
Between is a preposition. It should be used either before a
plural noun (The space between our desks is too large.) or in
conjunction with and. It is never used with the word or.
Correct: You must choose between IBM and
our company.
Wrong: You must choose between Robert or Mary
for the project.
B. Redundancies
Business communication should be as free of wordiness as
possible. Try to make each word carry its own weight. Padding not only makes
longer documents, it causes confusion. Drop excess words that have the same
meaning in your phrases.
absolute necessity:
Wrong: Eating three meals a day is an absolute
necessity for good health.
Correct: Drinking water is a necessity too
many of us ignore.
attached hereto:
Wrong: Attached hereto, you will find the
material you requested.
Correct: I have attached the material you
requested.
classified into groups:
Wrong: We have classified into groups everyone
participating in the study.
Correct: We have classified the
participating companies.
component parts:
Wrong: Several of the component parts were
missing.
Correct: Several important components were
missing.
C. Jargon
The dictionary defines jargon as "gibberish; incoherent
speech; speech or writing full of long, unfamiliar, or roundabout words or
phrases."
Sometimes people within a particular profession use jargon (shop
talk) that is unfamiliar to others, but understandable to them.
The use
of a language that is more showy or technical than it has to be usually
fails. We label such "language" with terms like legalese,
medicalese, journalese, or pseudoscientific. Such convoluted
language is considered gobbledygook
or lingo or an affectation, when used outside a specific profession.
While jargon is absolutely appropriate for an
audience/reader that knows it, it can sound pretentious to others. Business
writing is often amuck with affectations, in the mistaken belief that the
document will sound more important.
Converted speech is coined to explain a
concept (e.g., turning nouns into verbs: prototyping; upsizing,
analyzation), or abstractions (e.g., "we subjected our data to
meticulous modeling to ensure attainable results" rather than
"we tested our data and it works"), or buzz words (e.g.,
taxwise, shortfall, rollover, herewith). It is better to use
simple English. Rewrite your sentence.
D. Clichés
Try to eliminate clichés and hackneyed expressions from
your written work. Our speech is often cluttered with clichés, because they are considered
colloquialisms to our listeners, and, therefore, are more readily accepted. A formally written
document is not considered professional, however, if it is filled with trite
phrases. Here are a few to drop from your writing this month.
benefit of the doubt
a
capacity crowd took a drastic
action
equal to the occasion
last
analysis
part and parcel
moment of
truth
keep
options open a select few

II. Business Report
The
following is an example of a typical company report that needed substantive
copyediting. I show you the original, the editing process, and the
final version.
Original wording:
"Whether it is the provision of a product or a service, the same
basic approach is taken to make assessments of quality or effectiveness. As
the principles of process analysis dictate, there are three basic
components.
Inputs are basic resources that are acquired by someone to accomplish
a particular result. They are either products (such as cars, cameras, or
computers) or service organizations (such as travel agencies or insurance
companies).
Process involves the actions required to produce a product or service and
achieve the desired outcome. For example, the photographer’s use of the
various mechanical and electrical functions of a camera, or in the case of a
travel agency, providing the airline tickets needed to take a trip.
Output (Outcomes) are the actual results that are produced using the
process. For the preceding examples, outcomes would be a photograph and
actually taking the trip that was planned.
The application of this construct to effectiveness and quality
measurement involves the recognition that Outcomes obtained through the use
of either a product or a service are influenced by both Inputs and Process.
In the example of a camera, the quality of the picture produced is
determined by both the particular camera used (e.g. a Nikon 2000F) and the
functional operations of that camera (e.g. light meter sensitive to
background light). For a travel agency, it is the agency selected (e.g.
Travel Horizons) and exactly what policies and actions are provided by them
(e.g. delivery of airline tickets).
From the perspective of the buyer or user,
judgments regarding quality and effectiveness of alternative products or
services (e.g. Inputs) are based upon examination of measures of performance
(e.g. Output)."
Editing Process:
"Whether it is the provision of a product or a service, the same
basic approach is taken to make the assessments
of quality or effectiveness. As the principles of process analysis dictate,
there are always three basic components.
are basic resources that are acquired
needed by someone to accomplish a particular result. They are either raw
materials products (such as cars, cameras, or computers) or
a service organizations (such as
travel agencies or insurance companies)..
A photographer uses film and a camera.
Process involves the actions required to produce a product
or service and achieve the desired outcome
result. For example, the A photographer’s
uses of the various
mechanical and electrical functions ofn
a camera while taking a picture., or
in the case of a travel agency, providing the airline tickets needed to
take a trip.
Outputs (Outcomes) are the actual results that are
produced of using the process. For
the p receding examples, outcomes would be a photograph and actually
taking the trip that was planned.
Photographs are the result of a photographer's activity.
The application of this construct approach
to effectiveness and quality measurement involves the recognition
that Outcomes obtained through the use of either a product or a service are
influenced by both Inputs and Process. In the example of a
camera, The quality of the picture produced
photographs is determined by both the particular camera used (e.g.,
a Nikon 2000F) and the functional operations of that camera (e.g.
i.e., the proper response of the light meter
sensitive to background light). For a travel agency, it is the
agency selected (e.g. Travel Horizons) and exactly what policies and actions
are provided by them (e.g. delivery of airline tickets).
From the perspective of the buyer or user, judgments regarding quality
and effectiveness of an alternative products
or services (e.g. Inputs) Process are
based upon examination of measures of performance (e.g., Output)."
Final Version
"Whether it is the provision of a product or a service, the same
basic approach is taken to the assessment of quality or effectiveness. As
the principles of process analysis dictate, there are three basic
components.
Inputs are basic resources needed by someone to accomplish a
particular result. They are either raw products or a service organization.
A photographer uses film and a camera.
Process involves the actions required to achieve a desired
outcome. A photographer uses various mechanical and electrical functions
on a camera while taking a picture.
Outputs (Outcomes) are the actual results of
using the process. Photographs are the results of a photographer’s
activity.
The application of this approach to effectiveness and quality measurement
involves the recognition that Outcomes obtained through the use of either a
product or a service are influenced by both Inputs and Process. The
quality of photographs is determined by both the particular camera used
(e.g., a Nikon 2000F) and the functional operations of that camera (i.e.,
the proper response of the light meter sensitive to background light).
From the perspective of a buyer or user, judgments regarding the quality
and effectiveness of an alternative Process are based on an examination of
measures of performance (i.e., Output)."
(A Framework for Measuring Hospital Effectiveness, A Special Report
to the California Association of Hospitals and Health Systems & the
California Regional Hospital Councils, December 1992, Datis Corporation
{purchased in a merger and now defunct}.)

III. Company Brochure
The
following is a sample of a typical company brochure needing extensive
revision. It contains many grammatical agreement errors.
Important: A company is a singular subject and must take singular
pronouns and verbs. "It's" is not a pronoun; it is a
contraction for "it is."
Original Version:
SN&R South has built it's
reputation by providing their customers with proven dedication to
excellence and customer service. They expend all their
efforts turning your ideas into reality, by creating molds
that surpass their clients expectations. Regardless of
the type of mold, it's level of complexity or sophistication, SN&R
South can fulfill your requirements. SN&R
South has been featured in National publications for their accomplishments
in innovative design and product development.
As a leading manufacturer of plastic molds,
SN&R South has over 35 years of
experience in the most demanding of industries.
Committed to the highest level of mold
manufacturing, SN&R South has developed and produced a wide range of
molds for a variety of industry sectors that include: Computer
& Television Components, Automotive Instrumentation,
Medical Devices and Toy products.
NOTE:
The
preceding script has many grammatical and writing errors. I have underlined
several involving agreement of subject and pronoun, capitalization,
punctuation, and the switching of voice and tenses, as well as considerable
redundancies. Read the edited
version to see how it will immediately elevate a client's impression of the
company and its product and services. Note that a company is a
singular subject and does not take a plural pronoun.
Edited Version:
SN&R South has over thirty-five years of
experience as a leading manufacturer of plastic molds. It
has been featured in national publications, for its accomplishments in
innovative design and product development and for its proven dedication to excellence and customer
service. It has turned customers' ideas into
reality, by creating molds that surpass their expectations, regardless of
the type or its level of complexity or sophistication.
SN&R
South has developed and produced a wide range of molds for a variety of
industry sectors, which include: computer and television components, automotive
instrumentation, medical devices, and toy products.

IV. Employee Commendation
The
following is an example of an officer's commendation of a loyal employee, who
also received a certificate and a gift for exemplary service. I wrote the
commendation for the officer.
My congratulations and expression of personal
appreciation for your achievements at Dormers are long past due. On June
22nd, after six years of commendable service, you became Dormers' most senior
employee. No one has worked here longer than you, except for me!
Last August, at the company picnic, you were cited as the 1992-93 Employee of
the Year (a fitting way to celebrate your 5-year anniversary with us), but the
title in no way spoke of the extent of your value to us.
From the very beginning, you have epitomized
the ideal employee - one who has taken complete ownership and accountability
for the completion and shipment of . . . .
Thank you for your dedication, your
dependability, your suggestions for improving our product and services, and
especially for the results of your outstanding skills. Dormers owes a
great deal of its success to your perseverance.

V. Employee
Recommendation
The
following is an example of an officer's recommendation for a departing employee.
I wrote the recommendation for the officer.
TO WHOM IT MAY CONCERN:
Because of a recent merger and reorganization
of our company, many positions were consolidated or altered in manners
unacceptable to our employees. Jane Doe, who will mark her fifth year
of employment next month, finds herself in the latter position. Based
in our Minnesota office, Jane began her tenure as a part-time employee,
providing secretarial and organizational services for our regional sales
director and seven other sales representatives. She quickly earned a
full-time position and progressed to increasingly greater responsibilities,
eventually in telesales; she is currently Marketing Services Coordinator for
a seven state area and a sales representative for two states. Jane
consistently demonstrated her ability to adapt to a variety of assignments
and to work with all levels of personnel and clients .
. . .

VI. Fiction
Original
version:
I have underlined a few
problems in spelling and punctuation.
Machiavelli took his ragged brigade form La
Villita to the Alamo. The band of thirty men and women plotted their
attack briefly then began the pep rally they would need to endure in order to
lift their spirits and get them amped up for the attack.
Merivella lead the group in cheers, pumping his
fists in the air, while chanting Machiavelli over and over until the crowd
joined in. Hearing the chants thrilled Machiavelli. He left his
seat next to Charlie and Vigo, to rush into the middle of the crowd of
soldiers and begin his brief speech.
"Guys, gals, Ramses has oppressed us long
enough. It's time for us to take a stand to fight for what should
rightfully be ours. Gone are the days of old and the rules of the
ancient and decrepit of our kind. It's a new day, our day. Our
time has come to rule this kindred. To take from those that would keep
from us what we deserve. To establish the vampire race as the supreme
beings. Follow me now and you will have a place at the top. You'll
enjoy prosperity and success. I promise, once we defeat Ramses and
Zapporoah, we'll all live like kings!
"Are you with me?" Machiavelli
screamed with his clinched fist in the air.
"Yeah!" Members of the crowd
yelled back sporadically.
"Awesome," Machiavelli howled.
"Yeah!" they retorted.
"I can't hear you!"
"Yeah!"
"What?"
"Yeah!"
"What?"
"Yeah!"
"Then follow me!" Machiavelli yelled,
running from the Alamo towards Ramses estate.
Machiavelli's excitement at his own words
blanketed the crowd, they would follow him anywhere. Not so much because
of his poor and ill prepared speech or his promises but his sheer enthusiasm
itself. His tattered band rushed behind him on fleet feet holding their
weapons muzzle to the sky as they ran."
Substantively
edited version:
Machiavelli took his ragged brigade from La Villita to the Alamo. The band
of thirty men and women carefully plotted their attack and then began a pep
rally, to lift their spirits in preparation for the attack.
Merivella led the group in several cheers, pumping his fists in the air
while chanting Machiavelli’s name over and over again, until everyone was
involved. Hearing the chants thrilled Machiavelli. He left his seat next to
Charlie and Vigo and dashed into the middle of the small band of soldiers to
begin his brief speech. "Ramses has oppressed us long enough!" he shouted. "It is
time for us to take a stand and fight for what is rightfully ours! We are
not living in Egypt. We are not living in any of the past ten centuries. We
are about to enter a new millennium. It is time for change. It is time for new
leaders, for new rules. It is time to establish the vampire race as the master
race. We are supreme beings. Follow me now and every one of you will have a
place at the top! You will enjoy prosperity and fame! I make you this promise
. . . once we defeat Ramses and Zapporoah, we will all live like kings! Are
you with me?" Machiavelli lifted his clenched fist and shook it.
"Yeah! We’re with you!" the members of the crowd yelled in
unison.
"Can we do this?" Machiavelli bellowed.
"Yeah! Let’s go! Let’s go!" the crowd roared.
"Then follow me!"
(Absence of Faith, Jones, E. Carter, c2000, Writer's Club Press)

VII. Non-fiction
The following example reflects extensive editing of a
medical-theme book written for the lay public.
Original
Version:
What Exactly is Urinary Incontinence?
"The most general statement defining it
would be that it is an inability to control the bladder and hold the
urine. The following definitions are of main types of urinary incontinence
and descriptions of symptoms specific to these types. They all pertain to
the functioning of the lower urinary tract (bladder, bladder neck, sphincter and
urethra). Some of these symptoms may be intertwined with some other
symptoms to the extent that the clear diagnosis may not be initially
possible. In such a case, more extensive laboratory evaluation, such as
urodynamic analysis, may be necessary, to isolate the specific cause of causes
of the incontinence. At any event, the definitions below will help the
reader to get acquainted with some principal symptoms specific to the stress,
urge and mixed incontinence."
Edited
Version:
What Exactly is Urinary Incontinence?
"The most general definition of incontinence is that it is an inability to
control the bladder and hold urine. In the following paragraphs, more specific
definitions of the various types of urinary incontinence and descriptions of
symptoms specific to these types are provided. They all pertain to the
functioning of the lower urinary tract (bladder, bladder neck, sphincter and
urethra). Some of these symptoms may be intertwined with a few other
symptoms, to the extent that a clear diagnosis may not be initially possible by
the consulting physician. In such a case, more extensive laboratory evaluation (such
as urodynamic analysis) may be necessary, in order to isolate the
specific cause or causes of the incontinence."
(Elements of Incontinence: A Woman's Guide to Bladder Control, Kulitz,
A., Ph.D., c1999, self-published)
Original
Version of a S. Korean client's letter:
Korea Consumer’s XXX is
most authoritative organization that survey the general for each
industry field and publish it. This year, for first time, this
institution include overseas education service field for their
survey object.
Total of about 800
enterprises were selected after surveying the general for brand
recognition and satisfaction. We were finally awarded the number
1 for overseas education field, showing the wide gap from No. 2.
The
number of Korean students that study abroad has been on the
increase steadily with more than two thousands going out per
year, and with overseas education becoming the important social
issue. Hence, this would have been included in the General.
Edited
Version:
Korea's XXX is the most
authoritative organization in the business of surveying the
general public for the value and effectiveness of many
industries' services. This year, for the first time, the XXX
included the overseas education service sector in its research
analyses.
The XXX selected
approximately 800 enterprises for this particular evaluation.
After surveying the general public for brand recognition and
overall satisfaction, [our company] was awarded the Number One
position in the field of overseas education, showing a
remarkably wide lead over the company in the Number Two
position.
The number of Korean
students studying abroad has increased steadily in recent years,
with more than 200,000 leaving our shores each year. Overseas
education has quickly become an important social issue. [Our
company] is pleased with the results of this survey, because the
company’s continuous goal is to provide the best possible
service for each student seeking it services. The company and
its staff will work hard to maintain the trust and confidence
that is indicative in the results of this Forum survey.

VIII. Custom Birthday Tribute
The following are partial
examples of two special birthday tributes: the first celebrates a successful
businessman's fiftieth birthday, and the second recognizes the life of an
eighty-year
old mother.
In honor of a fiftieth birthday:
An occasion
like this is perfect for quoting people more well-known than yourself,
especially when the occasion calls for words of wisdom. The following quotes
speak directly of John Doe, and before I’m through speaking, you’ll know
why.
Every act of progress the world has ever known began first with a
dreamer. After him came the scientist or the statesman, the expert or the
technician. But FIRST came the dreamer. - Rabbi Maurice Davis
To dream is easy, but to have the dream become reality is difficult and
is achieved only with hard dedicated work. - Ann Poling
The rung of a ladder was never meant to rest upon, but only to hold a man’s
foot long enough to enable him to put the other somewhat higher. - Thomas
Henry Huxley
An entrepreneur is a dreamer. John Doe has been and still is a dreamer . . .
.
In honor of an
eightieth birthday:
An 80th birthday is a milestone, Mom. I would like this message to be a lasting reminder of how special you are to
me.
Any birthday is a day of special happiness . . . a day for sharing heartfelt
feelings and memories galore. . . It provides an opportunity to celebrate the
lifetime of a very important and special person. You are that important and
special person to me and have been for a very long time! James Garfield once said,
"If wrinkles must
be written upon our brows, let them not be written upon the heart. The
spirit must not grow old." Your spirit of youth, after eighty long
years, remains strong and vibrant and continues to challenge me.
(only a partial
example)

IX. CUSTOM RETIREMENT
TRIBUTE
I wrote the
following tribute for a corporate officer who needed to contribute to a special
scrapbook being prepared for the honoree:
Dear Friend,
Your retirement from the [state X association] has
coincided with the serious illness of my sister. Although you are
looking forward to the next exciting experiences in your lifetime, my sister's
have very possibly come to an end. Her situation has made me
increasingly aware of the meaning of life and the effect we have on each other
as we experience it.
At one time or other, you have probably had
someone ask you, as I have, "What do you want inscribed on your
tombstone?" The real question being asked was likely, "What do
you want your life to be about?" Knowing you, our answers were no
doubt the same. We want to have made some kind of positive
difference.
You have made a positive difference to
our
industry, in general, and to me, in particular. Your leadership of
Michigan's [X association] has been exemplary. From my perspective, you have
continuously conveyed a feeling of excitement for the evolving changes and
gone out of your way to encourage the sharing of information and utilization
of new and better methods with others . . . .
A partial
tribute.

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